Working+Thesis

Technology has evolved in the sport of golf since it began hundreds of years ago, and it has had an immense effect on the sport itself because it completely changed the skill level in golfers and what they are capable of, making many golfers incomparable.

I think you are getting closer........at least you have identified more of the areas you are going to pursue. You still need to work with the wording; it is a bit too long as is.